100 word assignment – WEEK 18

NB: for those interested, the prequel can be found here 
https://ventahl.wordpress.com/2011/11/08/369/
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OUT ON THE WIRE 
"We take them, soldier!" The rotor wind snatched at his command.

Kellar gestured to an infantrymen who bundled the frightened
villagers into the Huey. He motioned to ascend, glaring at his
subordinate.

"Look at their faces, O'Brien, they helped us. They'll all be
executed."

"Sir, we're too heavy. Charlie has us surrounded. Leave one behind!"

Gunfire peppered the fuselage. From inside the chopper, a woman
screamed.

The captain set his jaw. "Save them all, sergeant, my final order!"
Their eyes locked.

"Sir, No!" 

"Lest we forget why we're here!" 

Kellar tore the heavy chain gun from its mounting, kicked ammo from
the hatch and jumped.

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For those who want to know how it all ends, click here
https://ventahl.wordpress.com/2011/11/09/100-word-assignment-out-on-the-wire-sequel/
Don't, if you think this is quite enough.
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28 thoughts on “100 word assignment – WEEK 18

    • Read quite a few factual battles, Anna, and watched a few war movies. Haven’t read any first hand accounts though, although do have ‘Last Fighting Tommy’ on my bookshelf. Will read it soon.

  1. Wow! Great story-telling Andy. It’s got a ring of truth about it. This really does sound like an extract from a novel, or maybe even someone’s biography. I’d love to read the bit that goes before and after this – you might need to write it and add it to your blog!

    • I’m not sure its going to have a happy ending, SJ, but will give it a go. Maybe Kellar’s rambo but, I have a gut feeling he isn’t. However, I have just had an idea that might just save his ass without resorting to a deus ex machina.

  2. This prompt seems to go right to war. That is just the type of piece I want to write, but you have done it far better than I can imagine. Brings the heart to the throat …

  3. Pingback: Reflect and Remember: 100 Word Challenge for Grown Ups Week #18 « Hurtled to 60 and Now Beyond…

    • Cheers Ron, I think action should be as succinct as possible, without losing integrity. Sometimes, I have to write a paragraph from scratch again, just to keep the word count down. I tend to waffle.

    • He certainly seems the type, Robin! He is outnumbered, though, and even good men die when facing overwhelming odds, but then again, who says they’re overwhelming, might only be half a dozen and Kellar should be able to prevail, provided he doesn’t think he’s invincible (a common heroic tendency!). Any sequel would have to be believable though. I’ll see.

  4. I think this piece works well without the prequel. It’s very powerful and says so much about what I see as the disconnect between those who declare war and many of those they send to fight them.
    I was very moved by your writing here.

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