Punalada Trapera
“Muy bien, amigos.” Rodrigo’s gaze embraced the remaining banditos. Each was worth more dead than alive. “We keel ze treacherous cur when he returns.”
Muttered assent drifted round the cabin.
“Ze raid *was* heez idea, Rodrigo” Miguel spat tobacco on the floor.
“We lost half ze gang at El Paso. Zey knew we were coming.”
His brother nodded, then started. They all heard it. The creak of floorboards just outside the door. Pistols slipped from leather in greased unison and the shack thundered to gunfire.
Something red clattered through the broken window.
A blistered moment passed before anyone recognized the lit, crackling stick.
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How clever to move this to Mexico (?) for gangsters at a hideout. Loved the infighting and treachery. Well written.
Gracias, Senorita! Hey, you beezy tonight? Theeenk you and me kood Ay Caramba!
Memories of Butch Cassidy & Sundace V! Excellent scene setting & a great role for the window to play!
KA … BOOM!!!
Love the accents and the build up to what has entered through the window. Enjoyed!
Perhaps I should have called it: “The bad, the extremely bad and the downright ugly”.
You just can’t help it can you? All this talk of having no time, but you know you love this too much to keep away 😉 And this week TWO entries. Love the phrase “a blistered moment”.
Yeah yeah, it just popped into my head sat morning at 5am and couldn’t sleep. And felt slightly guilty I …er, cheated this week, so had to submit something original. 🙂 That was going to be a ‘frozen moment’, but how much ice can there be in Mexico? Blistered seemed more apt, like it was raw after gunfire …
Love it! Great scene setting! Left me wondering what happened next. And thanks for your very complimentary comment on my poem – very kind, and much appreciated.
The treacherous cur had obviously planned far ahead. This story was a joy to read. So much in such a tiny space.
Thanks sparks, I try to squeeze every last drop of action from the few words we have.
This is a great use of the prompt..I had to read it aloud, just to get the Mexican bandito accent. Reminiscent of Spaghetti Westerns 🙂
Yay!, guess ‘ze treacherous cur’ doesn’t have a name, either! And wears a poncho 🙂
Blistered goes so well with crackling, enjoyed! Robin
Better than ‘Frozen’ …. 😉